Reply Lynn Hamilton
Reply Lynn Hamilton
The introductory sentence of the question, “How can a person become a successful leader by being humble?” is an unnecessary. It is advisable when an opening statement is clear and links directly to the question provided. Giving opinions on how humility contributes to good leadership is lacking in the first sentence. Is unpretentiousness a perilous factor in producing a situation where personnel from diverse demographic upbringings do not feel encompassed (Prime & Salib, 2014), a question of concern? Nonetheless, relevant references which exhibit a clear understanding of the question is also another element lacking.
This part of the paper is perfectly tackled. The opening statement is attractive to the eyes of the reader, keeping him anxious to know about the discussion. The quotation was given, “in humility value others above yourselves, not looking to your interests but each of you to the interests of the others,” offers a clear lead by talking about the principle associated with it (Rothaermel, 2015).
This question too is well covered. Clear and brilliant evidence have contributed to the good flow of this section of the paper. Relevant verses from the Bible are as well important in this question so as to indicate how Jesus wanted others to live by his example. For instance, this is well evidenced from John 13:12-15 and also readings from 1 Peter 5:2-4. The reader in this part looks at that first impression created by answering this question, for instance, the verses provided above indicates a clear understanding of how Jesus wanted his followers to emulate him (Augustinsen, 2014).
- Overall Critique
The paper is of a good standard. You have been able to use hook statements appropriately doing your work to be attractive. You have managed your long sentences quite well by using the correct punctuation marks. The Harvard format is correct too. Good luck.
Augustinsen, J. (Nov 2010). Jesus leadership: A model for ministry. Ministry Magazine. Retrieved from https://www.Ministrymagazine.Org/Archive/2010/11/Jesus-Leadership-A-Model-For-Ministry
Prime, J. & Salib, E. (May 12, 2014). The Best Leaders Are Humble Leaders. Retrieved from https://hbr.org/2014/05/the-best-leaders-are-humble-leaders.
Rothaermel, F.T. (2015). Strategic Management (2nd Ed.). New York, New York: McGraw-Hill.